Travis Godbold


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I write books! Two of them are published on Amazon.

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  • Here is better version of story after a line edit.
    Once, a pretty lady, dressed in elegant attire, sat in a psychiatrist's office to have a consultation for anxiety and depression. A sympathetic psychiatrist listened intently to her problem, and then pointed to another woman who swept the floors, saying, “ she will help you with your problem”.

    He gestured to the woman to tell her, and she began her own recount. "My husband died in a road accident two years back which had made me very... very upset. Within six months of this, my only son died due to an incurable disease. This had left me completely broken down and miserable. I had confined myself inside the walls of my one-room home and seldom moved out."

    She continued with tears in her eyes. "One day I was sitting in a depressed mood. A kitten moved in through the open door. She was very hungry so I gave her some milk in a bowl, which I had kept for myself to drink later. She hungrily finished it and began licking my feet and slowly climbed into my lap. This made me very happy and I smiled for the first time since the death of my husband and son."

    The patient, wide eyed with interest, asked, "Do you still have the kitten?"

    "Yes,” the woman replied. “I still have it. I won't let it go as it gives me happiness. It has taught me how to smile again. One day I decided that I would do things that may bring the smile on people's faces. I began helping people in many ways in order to bring smiles on their faces."

    Once I came across Dr. Anil Khanna's clinic and reluctantly entered to meet the doctor. I told him my story and asked: "I want to do something for the patients that may bring a smile on their faces. I can do any odd job for you and will not charge for it. Can you let me do whatever you think is suitable? Dr. Khanna was impressed by my newly acquired belief and he let me work here. He pays me enough to support myself decently."

    The lady said after listening to her: "What you have just told has changed my perspective towards life. After facing much suffering in life, you have learned not to worry about them and instead help others to bring a smile on their faces. My sufferings are negligible in comparison to yours. Nevertheless, you have learned to smile and make others smile. This is really great. I will try my best to follow you. Thanks for opening my eyes to the realities of life."

    The lady left the clinic smiling after a long time.

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  • This a great yarn about the effects of PTSD on soldiers returning home, very terse, and to the point, but the characters and story were not too strong for my liking, because the way it was described was too direct and punctual. Think of describing things more like you described the caved in buildings where children played in Kabul, like a chocolate cake, because descriptions like that live and breath in a readers mind.

  • This story was well written, although you may need to return and flesh it out of redundant words, which are used too frequently throughout the text.