gerryonbroadway


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I have been writing a collection of shorts & poetry for years, but lost some in a move and wanted to do something with the rest.

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  • Not more to add in this tender moment except a few more details and a smoother first sentence. Better defined and this would be what Flash Fiction is all about.

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  • This writer has the potential to weave an interesting tale with a little more effort put forth. His sole character is not defined and the plot left hanging, even though wording is practically flawless.

  • This piece would have potential if writer went back to fix some grammatical errors and misspelling. Characters are likeable but their dialogue is hard to read with improper indents. The plot has little surprises since used one too many times before, with no effort to personalize.

  • As I'm sure is the case, author was once advised to keep it short and simple, but in so doing left readers with no dialogue, a way too simple plot, and fuzzy wording. People will take the time to read a longer piece as long as you make it worth their while.