Franc


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From childhood's hour I have not been As others were―I have not seen As others saw―I could not bring My passions from a common spring― From the same source I have not taken My sorrow―I could not awaken My heart to joy at the same tone― And all I lov'd―I lov'd alone"― Edgar Allan Poe "The boundaries which divide Life from Death are at best shadowy and vague. Who shall say where the one ends, and where the other begins?"—Edgar Allan Poe

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  • Some corrections of grammar, and a bit less cliche could make this a celebrated short story.

  • That is a full: Whoa! Good work.

  • In certain aspects the story already deserves 5 stars, in this age of every crap appreciated by amazon is faked into five stars, while the rest is dumped. In other aspects the story bores, and harms itself, by staying too close to the classic concept. The next hurdle, one which did cost me years myself: No German comma rules unto the English language, for they have their own. And they are actually a very tricky concept, even, when merely for better highschool level - The university degree flawlessness is damn hard work, at least to most of us.


    *Use commas to separate independent clauses, when they are joined by any of these seven coordinating conjunctions: and, but, for, or, nor, so, yet.

    *Common starter words for introductory clauses that should be followed by a comma include after, although, as, because, if, since, when, while.

    *Use a pair of commas in the middle of a sentence to set off clauses, phrases, and words that are not essential to the meaning of the sentence. Use one comma before to indicate the beginning of the pause and one at the end to indicate the end of the pause.

    Some psychologists advise to note: I pin this unwelcome sermon, because your story is worth it. True. Just that even proper effort never guarantees customers, or appreciation, or whatever else makes us write and publish...

  • <spoiler> Like myself you are a bit weak, or sloppy, when it comes to proper comma placement. Still I am certain that you could actually go into sales, with your own shortstory anthology aka short story collection (by genre, even), if you check your stories for the basic rules I gladly share with you. As example: <a href="#">https://www.bookrix.com/_ebook-andre-michael-pietroschek-vampire-attack-survivor-nightfall/</a> is a weaker work of me, and even that was considered good enough to try selling. </spoiler>


    *Use commas to separate independent clauses, when they are joined by any of these seven coordinating conjunctions: and, but, for, or, nor, so, yet.

    *Common starter words for introductory clauses that should be followed by a comma include after, although, as, because, if, since, when, while.

    *Use a pair of commas in the middle of a sentence to set off clauses, phrases, and words that are not essential to the meaning of the sentence. Use one comma before to indicate the beginning of the pause and one at the end to indicate the end of the pause.

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  • <spoiler> Very interesting 'play with reader expectations', but not running, as merely another Dracula intro! Good work, some missing comma placement, but otherwise outright noteworthy. </spoiler>

  • It is a remarkable tale play clearing composed by a professional writer. It rightfully deserves publication in hard copy as well.

  • From FARHAT on The Automaton of Da Vinci

    NICE

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  • From FARHAT on The Unnatural One

    Excellent plot and very well written.Will be looking forward for more.Regds

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  • From Riana Rivers on The Ebony-eyed Children

    This is a great story but I wish it was more in depth.

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