Nick Hays


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  • I liked the story, though it could need one more revision. What I found too cliche is the naming of the police detectives. Reminds a bit of the Gabriel Knight computer games. Recently I learned that linear, in fiction, is called railroading. The story is very driven down into one direction, some red herrings (false clues, wrong guesses) could be placed.

    <spoiler>Hebrews 2:14-15 New International Version
    14 Since the children have flesh and blood, he too shared in their humanity, so that by his death he might break the power of him, who holds the power of death—that is, the devil— 15 and free those, who all their lives were held in slavery by their fear of death.</spoiler>