Mr. BennettThe story is well written, and we can understand the protagonist. The problem appears when the inner voice starts pushing him. Please put those words in italics so we can plainly see who is talking, him or the voice inside.Lionel A. LaVergne author of Houston Beast, Innocence Lost, A Loup-Garou, and short story on here, A Hunting Trip.
Well done.
I realy liked the story, the last line was like a punch to the readers heart. Great job.
Mr. BennettThe story is well written, and we can understand the protagonist. The problem appears when the inner voice starts pushing him. Please put those words in italics so we can plainly see who is talking, him or the voice inside.Lionel A. LaVergne author of Houston Beast, Innocence Lost, A Loup-Garou, and short story on here, A Hunting Trip.